Putting these here for posterity, as they will disappear after the semifinal announcement on the 24th.
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
Main character development is very strong. The reader wants to know more about Riley and about how she moves past her trauma and who helps her.
What aspect needs the most work?
Maybe the secondary characters could be improved. The mother seems to be a strong positive woman but she is not really emphasized. Maybe she is later in the book, of course.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
This is a very interesting book, with possible appeal to girls going through difficult times. And what teen girl does not feel she is having a difficult life? The main character has had tragedy strike her and has developed some phobias but is still working hard for a goal. This would make it excellent for a school library or for a parent to get for a child.
ABNA Expert Reviewer
What is the strongest aspect of this excerpt?
The writing is really solid and professional. The dialogue is believable, and so are the characters. There's just the right amount of description.
What aspect needs the most work?
So far, it's not a hugely mesmerizing story. It's interesting and draws you in, but it's not gripping.
What is your overall opinion of this excerpt?
Very sound writing and could get more compelling as the story progresses. It's just hard to tell from this excerpt, which is really just setting things up.
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